Ziki has been slacking of lately yet again but the new release finally arrives.
Yet again, it’s two chapters at the time although unlike the last time, this time it was planned and those are completely separate chapters, although once again first is short and other normal. The first was not released as I wrote it a single day three days after the last release so it didn’t felt right to spam people’s mails that often.
Here is the link to first chapter
Chapter 55 “Secret of the world: First signs.”
I have little to say about this chapter other than it does not deserve the hype that it’s name might signify. It’s rather a good chapter and after reading it you will immediately realize why I wrote it without on a single breath.
Now as for the second chapter, when you start reading it you will immediately notice a certain change. I will describe it right below the chapter link… whatever it’s a good change or not, I am not sure but hopefully you will give me the feedback on that in poll.
LINK TO POLL (naturally: vote after reading)
In short the change is related to dialogue sequence. For those that don’t want to read my description and just see for themselves. Here is the link to chapter 56:
Chapter 56 “Two paths, only one choice.”
Okay you important parts are out time for my usual grumbling.
The dialogue system in chapter 56 was improved or rather morphed into what I would call, [Game chat dialogue]. That was one of my originals ideas on how to make the dialogue but because I saw it as annoying thing to do and believed that there won’t be any people reading what I write anyway, the dialogue is the way it is. But between the last and current release I read rather long book (three in fact, main reason for delay) in which the dialogue was kind of similiar to mine, meaning ‘exchange between the characters with little addition as to who is speaking unless it’s necessary’. While reading it it’s naturally possible to tell who says what (most of the times at least). There were often the cases in which it didn’t matter who said that but generally it’s better to know for sure. At the same time if you lose focus in the middle of the exchange, go grab something to eat, ETC… you might be forced to go back to reread the last portion, which is rather annoying thing to do.
While reading EOA, I naturally have never experienced this problem but naturally I am cheating as while I wouldn’t be able to recite the whole story word by word I would be able to reconstruct it easily from memory to a certain agree and the conversations and scenes would feel the same and the right character would say their dialogue. Generally before they sentence even begins I already know who is talking next. For me rereading is more like watching the scene from my memory and in dialogues listening to the voices of characters.
Naturally if someone reread the story multiple times, they might be able to do it to a certain extend but let’s talk about an average person that just reads the chapter as they come and will never bring him/her-self to reread as after all… over one million words. At best that person will reread few chapters of the story he liked the most.
So the experience in reading for you all is completely different than mine and while I think that my dialogue sequences up till now are good enough to be understand who is talking what, it might often be the case that, you will realize who is talking only two ‘pages’ later. Which naturally isn’t good unless that was the purpose although new [dialogue system prototype] can easily achieve this suspense as well when needed and at the same time you won’t have to wonder if one of the characters we already see/know, said something.
Returning to the story, while reading one book, there were few times I got confused or rather mistaken that someone said something while in reality it was someone else. (I wonder how often it is for EOA, you can give me feedback on that in the comment.) So as I was struggling through the story someone advised me to read a different version of it in which at the end of each dialogue sequence there is the name of character in the bracket. That helped a lot and reading with it worked in a funny way where I wasn’t reading the names in the bracket the same way I read everything else… saying that I was just look at it to be sure “it’s guy” is what it was.
So after this experience I started to think how evil I am to put readers thorough this with EOA. At the same time maybe this is one of the reasons why people usually drop my story after the first or second chapter. The next big drop is on chapter 5 where there is a lot of dialogue as well… although that’s mostly Anari’s doing. Leaving potential new readers aside I thought that I could at least to do something from now on, and I immediately though of my old good [Game chat dialogue] idea. Well the rules are pretty much the same as what I just described (meaning that idea wasn’t that original), although my twist on it is the way it is. Character names at the start of the sentences. Given that that there are some long speeches that take half of the page, this should work better. And also it has that in-game chat feel. If you didn’t check yet, generally it looks like this.
:Ziki: -muahahahahaha! I am so evil.
:Person A: -that can’t be true. Especially now when you though about for the readers for the very first time.
:Ziki: -oh, it seems like you didn’t finish chapter 56 yet if you can say so. Surprisingly on my email there were only few messages and asks about proofreading and still no death-threats, but it will change soon.
Apart from adding the name at the start, I kept the same formatting with – = … and such, even if only for the future possible easy change. The thoughts remained the same and they always belong to the current perspective character.
“While writing it was still fine but after rereading chapter 56, I couldn’t slept that night.”
That’s all about the dialogue. Be sure to check the questionnaire to tell me whatever you like it or not. If majority doesn’t like it I will return to the old style if majority likes it I will continue like this one from now on and eventually one day change the other chapters to that style as well (very very very far future).
What else ah right… now that the mini arc “Capital” that is the first part of third arc is ending it’s time for Art update… mostly of characters that appeared in the third arc. The last art update might have been 6 chapters ago but at the same time it’s been nearly half a year since then so I gathered some new things. Ah, after I wrote this I once again I realized how much I slacked off during the summer although for some reason I am always slacking off in the summer. First the tests arrive and there is no time and then I feel like I have all the time in the world so I can wait “one extra day” :). Anyway the link to art is here:
And now last thing is the reminder from the last time. Proofreaders still needed, as while there were some brave warriors that went on the adventure to vanquish the grammar errors, I gave away 30 chapters so far, some of them returned some don’t, so if someone is wondering the help is still need.